Enter Rayfall
Dinner was stil good (after i had timely saved the steaks from burning on the grill), and strangley enough, despite needing help with dinner, vash turned out to be an budding food and wine critic.
More then just friends... lDriving down memory lanel
Either way constructive criticism would be well respected,writing something without knowing its good or not is like writing to no one and enough random talk!
The life of a fox after war
I'm always open to constructive criticism and don't hesitate to comment or suggest ideas ;) the life of a fox after war after the war with kaguya, everyone went back to their respective villages to try and rebuild their lives.
End Of Our Worlds? Not today Chapter 01
If it's true then this is going to be some critical times. we even might have a war happening." all three scoots behind ortensia to read the rest of the news.
- Celesteon, the Apprentice of Light - Prologue Part 1
criticism is always welcome, but please don't shoot me down entirely, my self-esteem at this time is lacking enough as is. be on the lookout for part 2 of the prologue, which i guarantee will be released before the end of this upcoming weekend.
Futile
A large chemical plant on the edge of the city suffered a critical malfunction, dumping millions of tons of bio-hazardous material into the city. the effects were terrible. ninety eight percent of the population was killed near instantly.
Going Concerns (Chapter 5)
"you said we were stopping to buy critical supplies!" "we were." he handed her one of the mugs. "you never asked what i considered critical." she laughed, taking a sip. "so. do you have anywhere to be today, somewhere that's not right here?
Slice of Life: A Typical Morning
But you know, this is like my first actual story. x3 constructive criticism is appreciated, but no being mean please!
Torpedo Run Chapter 3
The caracal was only on her second jump, and thus assigned the mandatory cabin-time any critical crew were given on their first four leaps past a system terminus.
A Bully Story [Draft - Look for Cleaned Up Version]
.** **comments, criticism, advice, and words of encouragement are always welcomed and make me very happy :d** * * * it was the first day of the new school year and alex was already well known amongst the upperclassmen as a big bully.
Burdens - Chapter 78: Introspection
He had been a fool to criticize him without having known him, and if their teacher had not paired them together, he would still be the same negative fox he once was. had that been intentional?
That Gay Goth Dog: CHAPTER 3: The One I Love (part 3) :The Deth (part2)
"ok now be carfull hes in critical condtion.. he needs to stay here for a 3 week so we can look over him." the 3ed doctor said to haydens parents. "ok." they both said. i walked over and nuzzled haydens paw.