The Other Side Ch 1
This is my first time writing anything, so please watch, fave if you liked it and leave any constructive criticism you have. at this point in time, i have two stories that i want to write, this one (which i have no idea where i am going with it.
Morning Brew
Please, please leave a comment telling me how you liked it, and i am totally open for some friendly criticism.
Confusion
Take it easy on the criticism! ;3 the great wolf howled to the empty sky, his confusion his pain plain to hear. "why? why must i endure? all the others receive the happiness they wish for..."
Welcome Back to Cappuccinos! Part 4
Venti's ear flattened at the criticism. _i'm over thirty years old, outweigh him by a half ton, and bench press more weight with one arm than he can with both,_ thought venti. _so how does me feel like a midget around him?_ "yessir."
Poem #60: You
Every part of who you are is what defines you and you should value every piece sometimes you gotta take a step back and take in the whole picture all at once to realize what you are really seeing and it isn't easy to think it's hard to criticize
Mickey Mouse in the Public Domain - Chapter 11
Felix asked critically. "public domain, aren't we? everywhere is my jurisdiction." "i'm not sure that's how that works," felix said, "technically, copyright oughtn't be within your jurisdict-" "enough!"
Chapter 1: Just Friends
criticism is appreciated, also, this wont be really long fanfic, it is after all, just a fanfic. also!! the artwork i use is not made by me and belongs to their respective owners!
Futile
A large chemical plant on the edge of the city suffered a critical malfunction, dumping millions of tons of bio-hazardous material into the city. the effects were terrible. ninety eight percent of the population was killed near instantly.
Poor Charlie, We're So Sorry
"i've had it, annabelle keeps pushing me around, she criticizes me about everything, she may be trying to make things better for us but does all of it have to be a set up, itchy and sasha, do they have to be right all the time, i may have done somethings that
Home Again - Epilogue
I don't mind criticism, and any you may have given is well received (i have a good story involving grammar-correction, for the record).
Brother Light, Brother Dark: In Which the Two Connect
All comments, critiques, and criticisms are welcome.** after a couple minutes of phasing around, donichus morphed back their shapes on the barren outskirts of the city.
Adventures in College: Intro
Any feedback or constructive criticism is greatly appreciated and i hope you guys enjoy it^^ if i get mostly positive feedback i will make it a series but i'm pretty busy so the wait may be long between chapters:/ this will be just a short introduction. #