Daggers of Darkness, Book #5: "The First Ones" - Prologue
I only ask that you please keep criticisms constructive and polite. story, characters, and related art © 2013-2022 ronald j. lebeck (that's me).
Sacrifice without Gain is pointless
Inspired by the visual novel: blackgate it is sort-of the finale scene of a longer piece that i probably won't ever get around to writing constructive criticism is appreciated as i closed the door it disappeared, phasing into the wall around it.
Chimera - Chapter 6
He criticized, boring. while he was about to take a sip in his glass, a cow greeted him, shy: "good evening." "yes, hello." "i'm sorry for asking, but... are you alone?" "yes. yes, indeed."
Introduction: Abandoned
**** post thoughts, constructive criticism, and other comments in the comments below. ^^** * * * introduction: abandoned by snowiri the crystalline droplets of water flooded the desolate landscape around the broken canine.
1 Voice
criticism? comment away! her name is pronounced jee-ar-eeh-en . a voice emanated from the mountains. it was a droning and humming voice, deep and warm and tired. no one else lived around to hear the voice, just giarien.
Trials and Typing
With its high critical hit ratio, it was a good attack to have since it gains extra power due to stab. elgiza clenched her fist, hoping that the shorty wouldn't get the first point.
Marshall's Love Adventure
It's my first time writing something major like this, so any constructive criticism is appreciated. anyway, stick around because this story will take a while. :) part 2 coming out soon. disclaimer: i do not own paw patrol and this is simply for fun.
Black Velvet (Prologue of an unfinished story)
All criticizes, whether constructive or not, will help. prologue she regained her consciousness, but not her memory of where she was or why she was here. the world came to her focus, the fox finally saw the blood on her hand.
A New Look
As always, constructive criticism and feedback in general is highly appreciated.
Jaime's babyfur journal
An: consructive criticism is apreciated and nice comments are ok but mean one not accepted. if i see one mean comment i will remove this story i dont write for you i write for myself and i dont need to post these online.
Life by the Page 1
If leon was anything more than a novelist he was his own best critic. he always felt as though he didn't socialize enough, as though he was a recluse that only cared about his work. this wasn't entirely true of course but these thoughts did hold merit.
Story Concept 1 (ASU)
^^ lemme know how i did, criticism and all. depending on how much feedback i get, i'll continue playing with this concept