Not So Retired Any More II
#2 of not so retired any more okay here comes chapter 2 critique is very welcome. also: adult story! ye be warned! dead furs tell no tales (except in csi: furry)!
Ze'Tazz - Conception
In any case, it's the first bit (literally, his hatching.) and i hope to get some good critique and responses. enjoy. ^_^ the story of ze'tazz conception - "i see the tip! keep pushing captain!" cried the doctor.
A Wolf's first love Part 5: First date
As always comment, and critiques are appreciated and hopefully are making the story better._ "no you are doing this.
Chapter Two: It's Not What You Know
"well, it was one way to get him to stop the stirring critique," ryan mentioned. "i saw ms. faulkner glance at malcolm from time to time. i'm sure she would have said something eventually."
Spyro: Return of Darkness, Chapter 11 -- Eternity Begins Today
I'll get chapter 12 up very soon, but in the meantime, leave comments/critiques! i might put up a revised version of this, who knows...
Tony da Lion: ~Love again~
:p critique is much appreciated. let me know if you see something i can improve upon. if you have any suggestions as to what direction the story takes, feel free to share. who knows, if i like it enough, i might put it in and give you credit.
Wasteland Survivor – A Voice From Heaven - ch5
#6 of wasteland survivor back again, please go easy on critique on this one, for the few hours it took to bash it out i was pretty high on prescription painkillers, if its too terrible will pull it down (once i am down) and fix it.
Breakroom Treats
critique welcome! cast: bodbloat as steve "bod" bodbloat: the owner of pumpz magazine. a lava drake. vrghr as vrghr "vrghr" vrghr: the head of the cooking and food section.
Acadia's Curse: Chapter 2
critique is welcome!\ chapter 2: locals half asleep, i felt the train lurch and then shudder as it came to a rest at the acadia train station. my heavy eyelids parted to a fuzzy world.
Warrick's Tale part 0
Please enjoy and leave a comment, critique is always welcome. it took all warrick's will power to appear calm on the outside. while on the inside a storm of emotions raged. denial, 'this must be a joke, they can't be doing this to me.'
The Dark Masquerade Part #02
Comments/critique welcome master lao' nerves were on edge as he paced around the front gate. it was almost dark and bo and ying had still not returned. he knew he shouldn't have sent just the two of them. if something had happened... "sir!"
Let The Wind Blow--Chapter 1
Comments greatly appreciated for this novella, as well as critiques! _this is what i deserve_, thought lauren. _t__he crappiest denouement to this crappy night_. it was beginning to snow.