Brisk's and Noah's Date
Any feedback would be much appreciated! it is a warm sunny evening, a posh restaurant being in clear sight in front of me. looking inside there is a couple eating together; they are just eating their desserts.
2020 A.D. Part 1 [unfinished]
#11 of alte geschichte/old story fiction© shane translate and correction © arkoninu thumbnail © jugg4 i would be really happy to get feedback, but please keep in mind this is not the end version of this story.
GoodDays-old grolithe new tricks
Disclamer:i don't own pokemon,if i did there would be 20 new kinds i promise this is the longest ill make and review it i need feedback. i feed you entertainment you feed me improvements this*is the signal for my side notes . .......
Of Skyscrapers and Taxi drivers... Chapter 1: Cats, Snow, and a Doorman
Comments and feedback are always welcome, its what keeps us writers/artists sharp!
Too Safe
I am a beginner writer and feedback or any tips would be nice. note this is purely fiction, no actual events are portrayed in this story. ( jamie reed was a dark brown fox, stationed as a corporal at an army outpost in samarra, iraq.
The World Games Convention - Chapter 2: A letter to Dewi
#2 of the world games convention greatly looking forward to feedback of how to improve telling a story through letters!
Hull Breach (Otherwise Untitled)
Alarms ringing, the distinctive whine of a void reactor ramping into a feedback state, confused yells from the other crew members, and what sounded like plasma discharges from a ruptured axial conduit.
Wolfsbane Excerpt #1
This excerpt is not 100% complete, however i have done some minor editing on this small piece, and i'd love to hear your feedback. what more could be done with my style? does the flow seem right?
Five nights at Jack's (part 7) The end
But not too long tell me what you think, feedback is appreciated. lots of love ~nitro
The Love of a Riolu
I would like for some feedback on how i did. good and bad. it would really mean alot to me the sky was dark with spots of white stars and the disk of the moon. i just kept staring at it.
Astral High - Prologue
Point being, leave some feedback, enjoy, and get ready for another story! i awoke with a start, as if my alarm clock had gone off. i hit the off button, and looked around the room.
Such a Pig (Pig TF)
Please comment and give feedback "such a pig" (pig tf) isabel was a young girl at the age of 18. her features were petite but still very cute. isabel got wonderful grades and was generally a good person.