one nation (poem)
In this "one nation under god", Our sense of right is just a fraud. We pray for death in a foreign country, While people here are ever hungry. We hate the gays for their way of love, Then pass off our hate as words from above. We're afraid of...
All Over Soon
Give me your thoughts and critisism thank you._ **all over soon** written by: jon ballenger [verse 1] with my weapon drawn i begin the hunt at dawn i shall hunt you all down one by one i bet all you can do now is run you don't know
Love after all
This is my first time writing a story, so go easy on your critisism. \_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_
Second Chances: Chapter 1
Feel free to critisize as i am just starting to write for others to actually view so i'll probably need alot of improvement.
Mew-World: Proluoge
Comments, and helpful critisism are welcome, but no unnecasarry complaints, just because you don't like it.**
Chapter 1- Blood and Tear
Just wanted to say sorry to whoever i jacked the idea from. anyway, please comment, and rate, cause i wanted to get an idea of what i can improve on, and i know im not perfect. i am far from the best author here, so please give me some constructive critisism
a dark and stormy night
Blanket and he scoots closer and leans on me "thank you for helping me out" "of course this would have been a blessing when i ran away" ----this is my first story please comment the probs and the grammer problems and post your honest opinion positive critisism
All You Need is Love: Chapter 1
critisism is therefore appreciated so long as it's constructive.) david walked out of the large building shaking uncontrollably.
Fortune-chapter one Love??? (part one)
Hi, this is my first romance story ever so, critisism is great, constructive or othrwise, in case i'm that bad... anyway, this is the first chapter to a book thing that i thought up a few days ago.
First Steps: The Way It Is
Thank you guys all for reading it, and constructive critisism will be helpful okay well here it is.
my thoughts for the day
I feel retarded but i also feel beastly smart. i need to tell people who i really am and how i really feel. think of me all you want. call me names, critisize me, judge me, hate me, love me, tell me what you think. i care not what you say, all i care about
Past Life Ch 1
Oh, and ps: please leave any type of critisism. i'm sorta curious about my new prespective. ~~~ the story all began 500 years ago... the large manor stood proudly over the green hills. the white walls turned brighter under the bright sunlight.