How does everyone feel about my stories?
I just found myself really curious about his lately. I'm wondering how well my stories are received. I like to think I do a pretty decent job, but I could be wrong. Is there anything in particular anyone feels I need to improve on? Is there anything...
The Case of the Killer Queen (Part 1)
Feel free to critique what is here, and i will take guidance from whatever expressions are offered as to the worth of this collection of words as it stands, in determining my next move.
A Trio
"Well, well," said the doberman girl "What do we have here? Looks like a little squirrel lady's gotten lost!" The squirrel just stood there, too nervous to say anything. The girl in front of her looked tough. She was well muscled, with very thick...
Science for the Sci-fi Writer: Dark Matter
For a while now I've been wanting to write a series of articles about the 'science' in science fiction. How things presented in sci-fi might be plausible given our current understanding, and especially things presented in science fiction that we know...
The First Human
The First Human In the hut They had just made it out of the rain and into the abandoned habitat. The construct was once a towering complex, now transformed into ruined stone work by the orbiting fleet of the Brotherhood. Though this was in no means...
Jacks-Tail Formally Bio-Morph-One) As of 4-20-2015
This version integrates the critique from the last posting and finishes up chapter 9. the rape scene in chapter 9 has been replaced with more of a 'mental' rape as jack sucumbs to the body's instincts.
A sample scene
Taking critique on this sample work, it's pretentious af haha i haven't written a single piece in my entire life but yolo 'closer...almost there...just a few more steps to go.'
Accent experiment - Good or Bad?
critique mainly on the dialogue, the rest was thrown together. =( thanks!
Startopia: The Hovel of Outer Space
Startopia: The Shack of Outer space (Working Title) Ulysses, his name is Ulysses, a human from the colonies. A graduate from the Galactic University, with degrees in...
Great movie I miss the 70´s
I just watched Tarzoon Shame of the jungle a.k.a Jungle burger it was awesome I hadn´t laughed that hard since they stopped the re runs of the Fresh prince of Bel Air and Full house. It was a sexy Sharknado it was so bad it was hilarious my type of...
Healing
Ayle yanked the kobold spear from Rith's punctured armor, tearing a fair amount of flesh back with it. The wolf let out a wordless moan of agony as the gryphon worked by the light of his staff. "Hold still, Rith. I can't - Oh never mind." Ayle set a...
"BLEU" - Harmony
The most common critique to the mbti is the misidentification, and even this one has many layers. personally, i believe that i have dug close to the bottom for the mbti, deeper than many already.