How does everyone feel about my stories?
I guess i just want some feedback. i don't get a lot of comments on my stories, and i'd really like to know what people are thinking about my stuff. i like to imagine that i'm doing just fine, but it's hard to really be sure, ya know?
A small update
Hello Everyone, I haven't been writing much lately due to the fact it's hockey season and I'm juggling that plus work amongst other more mundane real-life obligations. My pet rabbit also recently died so I just got over that little emotional trauma....
Gargoyles: Clan of the South- Part 2
feedback is greatly desired. this is the raw un edited version, and is subject to updates. the sun descended on the horizon. as night fell on the manhattan skyline the gargoyles woke from their stone sleep.
Gargoyles: Clan of the South- Part 1
feedback requested. this story is subject to being edited he landed in a darkened alleyway, his wings aching from the amount of gliding he just did. he wasn't tired but his breath sounded loud to his own ears.
Blood and Shadow- Chapter 2
Without another word Hybrin stepped out of the tent, leaving the women to the task of bathing, and dressing the newly liberated feline. Night had already begun to fall and the temperature was rapidly dropping. Hybrin could feel the cold wisps of wind...
Welcome to Heat Street: C4 - Feedback Loop
Kaari didn't normally try this hard. Clothes were just another layer — something to drape across her coat so the world wouldn't gawk at the wrong time. She dressed for comfort, efficiency, maybe a hint of ass if she felt like it. But not today. Today,...
Chapter Seven
If awdae were to turn up the gain almost to the point of feedback, ey could try and make noise in various points throughout the auditorium. the more feedback ey generated, the more sound the mic was picking up.
Desperation Short scene (Feedback needed)
If possible, i would like some feedback on how it read out, since these sorts of scenes are not really all too familiar to me yet.
project X (Pt 4)
Me and feedback will share one and you guys can use the other to hold your stuff." rex said taking a seat at a pile of rubble. "you did? t...t...tt.that's great!!!" feedback yips happily.
Under the influence Pt. 1 (Draft/Feedback Wanted)
**Olivian couldn't remember seeing the grand hall of his lineage populated like this. Not that the admittedly clumsy structure of mud, stone and wood had ever been a grand sight to begin with. Still, his father -and his father before him- had...
project x (pt 3) the calm before the storm
"no don't go feedback if you're going i'm coming too." i'm sorry i can't let you do that." feedback said "uhh guys i can't keep them down much longer." he said slashing another zombie. "i'm sorry goodbye" feedback said handing foxtrott the sword.
Writing Advice: Show, Tell, Adverbs and Others
Ultimately, the best way to spot whether you're telling or showing too much is by trusting the feedback from your readers.