Introduction: Bellatrix
critiques appreciated, even a little goes a long way. thanks for reading. both characters in the story belong to me. pockett peaked out at the busy roads from under a drippy storm drain. water sprayed as motor vehicles passed by.
Pokémon: Phazon Purple, Patch Notes
Chapter one - version 1.1 (based on critique by: xials92) - - minor spelling errors fixed. - improved lucia's speaking parts and clarified final scene interactions. - version 2.0 - - minor direction errors fixed (north, south, east, west, etc.
Project Warblade: Chapter 1
Any critique, comments, favorites, or anything else will help greatly. i'll be working on chapter two sometime tomorrow and i'd really love to know how i can improve! and yes, this was imported from my fa.
That Day
Note from the writer- this is my first story, so feel free to critique it. i accept you're feedback. april 7, 2008- 5:00 am "riiiiiing riiiiiing!" the alarm clock sprang into life, singing the song of its people.
To Knock at Heaven's Door
Please critique and comment. :) the night began as any other; darkness sweeping away the heat to reveal in its wake a vast sea of shimmering diamonds. they beckoned. i obliged. the initial rush!
Team Smartz Ch.1 - Lucky Penny
Comments & critiques are appreciated (i want real, constructive criticism dammit!)
The Garden
Because of how old it is you're free to post honest opinions about the quality or style, but not any serious critique because i've made steps in different, more serious writing. xd i have no idea what tags to use for this.
Daily Tale 07/24/14: Sick Day
If you could give me feedback and critique i'd love it. also, if you find any grammar or spelling errors please point them out. i also encourage all you furs who are writers or who want to write to try this idea and see how much they improve.
Path of the Lion (Dramatis Personae)
Kingdoms enjoined #1 - path of the lion okay - so i've had my reservations about uploading this anywhere because the kingdoms enjoined trilogy is something that i really intend to be my magnum opus, but i finally decided that uploading it here and getting some critique
Family and Friends
critique would be like, but try to keep it as positive as possible please.
An Unusual Pregnancy
She showed not her face, but fain would amaze my muse through command of her quill, inspiring wit; to fave and critique...
Prologue: Minraya
* * * **so yeah i have decided start my path as a writer making some little stories about war, don't worry thought i am don't too edgy, please leave your comments with feedback and critique so i can make better writing in the future**. **thanks!