Tales of Torrnal: Chapter 2
Please comment and critique! been a long while since i've written.
Clipped Winged Crow
And critique me, i don't bite. \_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_ i've got a crow sitting on my window tapping, begging to be let in so many treat him like an angel and, god, hes a beautiful sin i've got a spider in my
Path of the Lion (Prologue)
Lion as i mentioned in the last upload, i've had my reservations about uploading this anywhere because the kingdoms enjoined trilogy is something that i really intend to be my magnum opus, but i finally decided that uploading it here and getting some critique
Ze'Tazz - Conception
In any case, it's the first bit (literally, his hatching.) and i hope to get some good critique and responses. enjoy. ^_^ the story of ze'tazz conception - "i see the tip! keep pushing captain!" cried the doctor.
Warrick's Tale part 0
Please enjoy and leave a comment, critique is always welcome. it took all warrick's will power to appear calm on the outside. while on the inside a storm of emotions raged. denial, 'this must be a joke, they can't be doing this to me.'
The Tunnel
I look forward to comments and suggestions, as well as critique and any errors that you might spot that i missed in my personal editing. for those of you interested, this is my submission to the wordsmith awards challenge by naraki wolf.
Spyro: Return of Darkness, Chapter 11 -- Eternity Begins Today
I'll get chapter 12 up very soon, but in the meantime, leave comments/critiques! i might put up a revised version of this, who knows...
Out in the country
Remember to comment and critique.
Project_Demise - Excerpt
I ask only for the harshest of critiques, because when my book is finished i'll have to deal with even harsher critics. so give me a totally honest, no holds barred critique. i'm a big boy. i can handle it.
In the World After: Chapter 4
As always, critique and comments are great, and don't be afraid of honest critique. if you notice any inconsistencies, just let me know, and me and maeve will get it worked out. david had been shot. jonathon, ben, and stephen had been killed.
Different
Comment and critique as harsh as possible. i need to learn how to write even better! oh, and i know that there's no yiff in this story, the following instalments do, though. this is more to set the stage. -- the spring air was pleasant today.
I Know (poem)
Ok, not at all one of my firsts on this, but its still so-so i think =/ one of the few i have on da (i have a lot actually written down but i just am really self-conscious about things xd) critique and comment please!