MoonDust, Chapter 34
They said he and twelve of the most critically wounded died in the night." "all together?" "yeah." he took a breath of the thick, feted air and coughed. "probably colonel bitch prioritizing who gets to keep burning oxygen.
Ander - Part 6: Subchapter 172
In the critical moment, just before he squeezed the trigger, he was filled with a vision of what would happen if his aim was off by a hair, how nilia's face would explode, how bits of her brain would splatter against the wall.
Pilot
I'm open to any questions, comments, and criticism! thanks for reading. # pilot (nick) > _like all good things_ > _"the mission comes first.
Chapter 3: The Insect Badge...
It was not only a critical hit, but it was a poisoning critical hit, meaning that if it was used again, it would do double damage if use again, so of course it was used again.
I'm Not a Hero...
Now more so than before since the ship is in critical condition. we need to move as quickly as possible." she looked at slippy and nodded. "take us in, slippy. nice and slow. once we're in range, activate the tractor beam."
Into The Stars. Chapter Two.
The damage on the outside was critical only for the storage bay. however, it looked as if the ship itself had been sabotaged from the inside.
Venturing: Repat
Ling and his group must figure out why the critics are like this and solve the 'real' problem that the entire intertwine realm is facing. but will it be enough to bring an end to the critics of yang?
Canis Lupus Leoprius
Before i get criticized on the evolution and body development part, realize that i added goddess power(essentially magic) to this equation and that screws over a lot of laws and stuff. other than that feel free to hate on grammar and etc. [!
LSH 5: Rules and breaking them
The woman on the other side scanned the younger dragoness with a critical eye. “well, you definitely got your money's worth out of that one. look at you." she said with a judgmental glance to her mother.
The Nature of Life - Prologue
Also, as always i love comments, constructive criticism, ideas and suggestions! this is a m/m story series.
Torpedo Run Chapter 20
A second screen showed readouts from critical systems aboard the fist of the nascent dawn, appealing to her more mechanically-oriented professional mind.
School Crush : Chapter 1
And yes, this is my first story, so constructive criticism isn't bad!