The Legend of Zelda: The Totem King- ch 5 Transformation
Bairda started examining her, like some sort of art critic over a statue. finally, he backed up. "she smells like the queen," he stated, apparently pleased. zelda wasn't. "you _smelled me?!?_ disgusting!"
"Daggers of Darkness" - Epilogue
I only ask that you please keep criticisms constructive and polite. story, characters, and related art © 2013-2017 ronald j. lebeck (that's me).
musket prologue: chapter one, intro
#1 of musket i am using this part of the series for a school assignment. the capitalization is not there because the writer doesn't use them in letters. this is my first furry story so criticism is recommended. also another thing, i probably will upload this
RR'D: Kenashi O
Min was critically wounded, the bullet manage to pierce his aortic artery, he was bleeding out, badly, kenashi came to his dying father and listened to his final words, "ken, live a loving life, hate never leads to anything but misery".
Aftermath Chapter 6 - Farewell Mix
I was considered close to dead, in critical condition from lack of food. they began to feed me via iv and force me to begin to move around a bit more. the entire crew wanted me back, they needed me. i had to learn to be strong.
welcome to verra-part one the destined lovers
Its well short but plz comment and give me your criticism but no hateful ones thank you one day in the normal central desert,forest town known as moontown far off in the western atmosphere of verra,a young wolf embued with a certain kind of power happened
The Unknown Soldier
All feedback is welcomed, but please make all criticism consturctive in nature. thank you. prologue: with empty brass lining the way, a lone soldier wanders the fields wounded physically and emotionally.
Brother Light, Brother Dark: In Which Brothers Will Be Brothers
All comments, critiques, and criticisms are welcome.** "i don't need to be reminded of our pasts when enough comes to mind about it already," tyrannio snapped. "i'm well aware of both our histories enough for my understanding.
Seppia: Game Mechs and Out of Character Items
Attaker's roll 00: critical (3xdamage) 01-30: full damage 31-60: 50% damage 61-98: miss 99: fumble (self damage) if the attacker rolls double zero (00) the defender recieves three times the damage they normaly would.
Shadows Bleeding From The Light:Prologue
As before, feel free to leave comments, advice, criticism, etc. tokam slowly raised his head from his mother's side. the early rays of dawn were shining through the hollow in their tree. he stood and watched his mother sleeping for a moment.
Dreamy Downpour
As usual, comments and criticism are welcome. -ephy
Behind Enemy Lines: Chapter One
I take constructive criticism as well as compliments, but please go easy on me since its my first story! i will hopefully post more just as long as life doesn't mess with anything :d. this is section, over and out.