Project: Tuqiri -unfinished-
This is the story so far please comment on any improvements that could be added when i continue this.
Prologue
Cdf has also promised that if it all went smoothly that they would help improve earth's technology and would like them to be their ally in fighting andross which earth hesitantly agreed on the exception that if anything happens to the teen then the peace would
Jurash "goju" Sulfam (French version)
English is not my native language, so i need to improve my skill in it. this french version is just here for francophone fur and/or for comparison with the english version.
A Tale of Lost Souls: Part One
I'm looking for some criticism so if you'd like to help me improve, and if you want more, message me. i may or may not keep writing it in second person, that'll depend on the response i get from this chapter.
Bereft can end
The end held it steady but got stopped, new friend former sun was gone, but new ascended the school changed to another, a new light new people descended from above, mended my heart, was nearly gone, gave new might a life will i was given to improve
Latias and latios CH.2 (Part 3)
Say how i can improve. **chapter 3: he is coming back home, back to us!** \ adam opened the door to his house. "mum! i'm home!" no reply. "dad?" still no reply. "jan!?"
THE FRONT: PART 8
They had been taken to the rear and there was nervous talk of amputations that did nothing to improve general morale. "yes private, i'll be there in just a second, just got to lace up my boot..."
A Human Outta Place
Light criticism is allowed to help me improve.** * * * chapter 1: not on earth in the city of new york there was a 16 year old boy walking through its busy streets his name was ykerum hatake.
Poem #50: An Understanding
Don't understand what it's like to want to die to wish your life over to think no one will care if you are gone some don't understand the beauty of wondering why to question and wonder and to think until your questions lead to questions that improve
A Bronze Rising: Smoke and Fire
Tobias had improved somewhat on the flight over here, but he still looked pale and coughed occasionally. i set him on the high stone wall and looked him directly in the eye. i had only a couple moments. "i want you to witness as i claim this territory.
The Lost October (Novemberween)
And while i've noticed an improvement, it's clear it's not fully shaken off. so what to do about spook month? it's over and i missed the deadline i suppose...well, the simple answer is to simply make it up. and why not?
Miharra's Battle
I like to write and i want to improve so i'd really appreciate any feedback given.