The Word in Ink & The Happy Ending
Waggish, but wore / and for marring the mind / while so brashly behind / the fox gave him right roughly what for / for his maiming and mauling, jack moped / and so glumly he grappled and groped / with tod's frequented tackle / his critiques
Legend High-Chapter 12
.** **anywhozle, debate this for the polls, stalk this fic, love it or me, and critique your asses off!** **moncheli!**
Of a Time Before
I am always open to critique as long as it is constructive. if you don't play nice, you won't be invited to my tea party. i hope you enjoy.
The Lead Crown: Ch 8.5c, The Great Illusion
The floor is now open for questions, comments, and critiques!
Caprice
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Lavender Scent (Poem)
I'd be happy to take and critique even though it's an older work, always looking to improve. lavender scent drifts palely into the room, as sun and moon trade places in the sky. sadness shall find nothing here but doom.
The Stone- Chapter 2
:d please, do not be shy aboiut critiqueing or commenting!
Pokémon: Phazon Purple, Patch Notes
Chapter one - version 1.1 (based on critique by: xials92) - - minor spelling errors fixed. - improved lucia's speaking parts and clarified final scene interactions. - version 2.0 - - minor direction errors fixed (north, south, east, west, etc.
Star Fox Chronicles: Chapter 35: Enter Chaos
And again, any advice or helpful critique is welcomed. oh and this chapter has some expression of a homoerotic nature in it. if you are offended by such stuff and too young than don't read it, otherwise enjoy.
Early Withdraw
I am not exactly familiar nor completely comfortable with the short story format so any (constructive) critiques you wished to share would be most welcomed.
Introduction: Bellatrix
critiques appreciated, even a little goes a long way. thanks for reading. both characters in the story belong to me. pockett peaked out at the busy roads from under a drippy storm drain. water sprayed as motor vehicles passed by.
Wasteland Survivor – A Voice From Heaven - ch5
#6 of wasteland survivor back again, please go easy on critique on this one, for the few hours it took to bash it out i was pretty high on prescription painkillers, if its too terrible will pull it down (once i am down) and fix it.