Jen of Asara Part 1: Of Kings and Contests
I hope you all enjoy it, and comments and critiques are much appreciated.
Max and Rita: Lilith's Wrath Chapter 2
Ninja skills that allowed me to sneak by you but then i heard you talking to your pokémon so i thought maybe this guy is some kind of nut but before you judge me i then found out that you actually seemed to be having a conversation so i erased that harsh critique
The fruits of her labor
Special thanks to my helper, critique guy, formatter, proofer, etc: kanohaninja amongst the roots of a great tree a lone grey wolf lay with her back to the trunk.
Life and Love
All critique is welcome, as this is an evolving story, and if it would be a better story for someone elses imput, then i'm all ears.
The Lead Crown: Ch 9.3b, Shock and Awe
Comments, questions, quandaries, critiques, and input is always appreciated. thanks for reading! tranquil waters: the lead crown ch 9.3, shock and awe the fight against the church's men had been a tough one.
Bomb Shelter
critique is welcome, but be gentle. **chapter two - bomb shelter** ** ** the project was about as exciting as could be expected for a class outside of her major.
Only a Painting
I jumped suddenly when i heard a certain critique: "i dunno, i prefer a tails hedgehog combination." "t-tails . . . " i said, nervous. "i'm sorry," he said, "i hope i didn't interrupt a surprise." "no . . . not at all."
Warrick's Tale part 0
Please enjoy and leave a comment, critique is always welcome. it took all warrick's will power to appear calm on the outside. while on the inside a storm of emotions raged. denial, 'this must be a joke, they can't be doing this to me.'
The Dark Masquerade Part #02
Comments/critique welcome master lao' nerves were on edge as he paced around the front gate. it was almost dark and bo and ying had still not returned. he knew he shouldn't have sent just the two of them. if something had happened... "sir!"
Let The Wind Blow--Chapter 1
Comments greatly appreciated for this novella, as well as critiques! _this is what i deserve_, thought lauren. _t__he crappiest denouement to this crappy night_. it was beginning to snow.
We Regatta Get To Egypt
We managed to get ahead of the critiques and the publishers. we're no longer in last place. how can there be a problem?" suddenly, they hear a beeping sound. zax looks over at the gauge and sees how much gas they have left. almost empty. "yep."
Depressive Thoughts (working through writers block)
critique is always appreciated, so enjoy, and tell me what you think! :3 i had absolutely no idea where i was. i had been wandering around for what seemed like hours in a bleak, shapeless, wasteland.