Writing Tips vol. 4
You want to avoid sounding out all the little quirks that come with real life dialogue. unless they're absolutely necessary, don't add in all the ums and ers you might hear in a typical conversation.
The Origins of Crola, the Snake Sorcerer (Naga Snake TF)
The knocking, sounding more like banging, is non-stop, accompanied by the gruff voice of a man. "we are the imperial guards!" he said, "open up!"
A Tasty Squirrel + A Hungry Fox = An Unhappy Squirrel
Following another sad whimper, a small, weak, and utterly defeated voice quietly resonated from the vixen's tummy, sounding as if every syllable was laborious.
Living with a Giant- 1- First Impressions
"only if you stay with me," he says after a while, sounding satisfied as if he had tricked me or something. "you can't do that," i say, not believing that i was being held hostage by a giant dragon guy.
A Heart Reconsidered VI
“your magic burns,” teras said, sounding a nervous to my ears. i turned to him, still leaning on my staff. “yes, it’s for starting fires.
House Mutt
Also, for some reason i imagine claude sounding like the martian pilot from the expanse, i dunno why. um, that's about it from me. i feed off anonymous approval, so comments/faves/likes/whathaveyous go a long way.
Kyurex (Pokemon): Part 15 - Battle Test
She said, sounding confident. kyurex smiled. „well, ok then." the battle was finished. the miltank clapped her hands, showing her obvious pleasure in being victorious.
Raven Wolf - Book 02 - Chapter 08
He sighs that sounding even worse, that sounding like she had no choice or control over the situation. shiya grumbles to himself as he continues his pacing trying to think of something else.
Jayden, Chapter 18
With a smirk, craddok puffed on his cigarette, the softest of clicks sounding as he undid the lock on his knife.
Shoppin' for a punk...
Leaving that shapely equine rump lifted in the air, as abarfo's sweaty crotch smacked against it with a loud wet sounding **_'smack smack smack'_**.
I, Dacien - Chapter Two - Investiture
"probably not," admitted sasha, sounding a little sheepish. "i think sasha underestimates himself," said cresphontes with a deliberative calmness. "does anyone know more about lens addiction than sasha?"
Worlds Apart - Chapter Four
Jim asked, sounding nothing if not horrified. he lowered his voice to a whisper. “he smells funny." dan laughed. he didn't want to, it just came bubbling out.