?A Boy and His Ampharos
So please enjoy it and criticism is greatly appreciated. a boy and his ampharos warning: this story contains pokemon and soft non-fatal vore so if you dont like this thing do no read this story.
D.M.O.N. Chapter three
I do accept any comment or critics, since it is my first. so any critics and/or comments from the readers i will gladly hear it. thank you.
The Good Ship and Crew
_1311:07.300: iam-c5/b54 critical alert (-5.16 / 0.2 / 05)_ _1311.07.306: iam-c5/b54 critical alert (-7.1 / 0.2 / 05)_ _1311:07.307: iam-c5/b54 critical alert (-inf / 0.2 / 05)_ _1311:07.308: iam-c5/b54 critical alert ( 0 / 0 / 0)_ _1311:12 diagnostic
My Grand, Frozen Heart part 1
Any constructive criticism will be taken under consideration, along with comments. in the winter night of the suburbs, i walked home from meeting with a friend until 8:30 pm. the amber floodlights above shone the snow a flaxen gold.
Welcome to Golden Sun
I wish you the best while you look through this setting and hope that you have fun along the way -pierce (input and comments would be greatly appreciated as well as advice and constructive criticism.
Azure Phoenix: A Handy Guide
Delta serpentis- a strange system, with only one jump point connecting it to the military hub of deneb, it nevertheless has a robust deposit of many minerals and ores needed for starship construction, making it a critical world to the concordat
Zen And The Great Ones Vault
If you have any criticisms or anything its all appreciated!_**
November Challenge #1: What Replaces Talent?
Yes, the same rules that had governed music, the same rules that the critics wielded like hunters' rifles, cutting down anything that was - jenny wanted to call herself different.
Torpedo Run - Chapter 1
Space is a dangerous place, and everyone's eyes and ears are critical. you see something wrong, out of place, or strange, you tell me immediately.
BX-132 Chapter 6
# # in the midland medical center's critical care unit's level 8 contamination isolation room two, rafe and sally lay side by side.
Turning the Tide
A single frigate and a cruiser operating alone didn't make sense; such a formation lacked several critical abilities, and by the same token, possessed several critical vulnerabilities.
"Daggers of Darkness" - Epilogue
I only ask that you please keep criticisms constructive and polite. story, characters, and related art © 2013-2017 ronald j. lebeck (that's me).