Into the Horizon: Power Contested Part 3
This one was the sub-light's going critical. dasher heard the door open and realized that he was helpless to do anything to save himself. he still didn't have his vision.
Third Arc Crimson Moon: Epilogue
Just a few critics who were a little harsh on rob but nothing to cry over." "good..." alexiel reached into his coat and pulled out several documents.
Rexi & Talon: 15 -- Rexi
Why was it critically important to send a messenger to the goldsmith, and tell him _do not proceed on my order_. what order? who was zackton working with? why? rexi was practically grinding his teeth.
Legend High-Prologue Part One
"yes, but she's in critical condition. you'll have to live with a friend or family memeber 'til she's recovered enough to take care of you." answered the doctor.
Dynasty: Origins, Act 04: Racing Out of Debt
It seemed to be slower now, apparently actually taking a critical hit. apparently the text that had appeared wasn't exaggerating. i didn't see a sign of the first place hovercopter as of yet, but i knew i wasn't that far from it.
Starkind: Defy the Dark
A confederal asset and exo-law enforcement officer, acting on behalf of the critical operations protection agency, awakens aboard her nearly derelict ship--the csos spear of diomedes--in critical condition, her memory of events prior fractured due to brain
All's Fair - Part 2
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Chapter 3: Expect the Unexpected
Comments and constructive criticism always appreciated.
Jaime's babyfur journal
An: consructive criticism is apreciated and nice comments are ok but mean one not accepted. if i see one mean comment i will remove this story i dont write for you i write for myself and i dont need to post these online.
Life by the Page 1
If leon was anything more than a novelist he was his own best critic. he always felt as though he didn't socialize enough, as though he was a recluse that only cared about his work. this wasn't entirely true of course but these thoughts did hold merit.
Welcome Home Sasha
She lightly toweled the younger female off and again eyed her critically, her eyes roving to the feline's heat swollen slit. "the first heat is always the worst."
Natural Twenty (WIFWOLF)
\>she then throws the die onto the table \>everyone seated at the table leans over to see the result and it’s a…one \>the rat leans back in his seat \>”critical failure.