A Fateful Fall Encounter
P-please respond (with critique, preferably). it was a peaceful autumn evening at the park. children exhausted from a long day of playing in the leaves were taken back home by their mothers.
Jeremy 093; Its Not The Slope Its The Lack Of Friction
Our motive in asking you to join is to use your critique to help make the program better each time its offered." the otter stood looking up at jeremy. he was clearly thinking over what had been said. "i appreciate that.
The Plains- Chapter 1: The Beginning
#1 of the plains this is my first story that i have written in a long time and i plan to make into a chapter story so i may share my work in between sections of writing so i can get critique as well as friendly feedback.
August 5: At the Ooshima Inn
And finally, a genuine critique from someone that's not dad!" "who else tastes what you cook?" "tatsu-nii." tora scratched his head. "and he ain't exactly the best judge of things, washing everything down with alcohol."
Fire
In other words, no critiques, because i already know it's terrible. also, i'm leaving all the naughty stuff up to your imagination~_
Jeremy 015; A Cause For Concern
He sat down with jeremy and critiqued his performance as they watched each version. at the end of an hour he suggested jeremy was ready to join one of the regular sessions.
Dal Segno
I also know that we're all somewhat sensitive so i try to be as kind and tactful as possible when it comes to my critiques and i always tell her what she played well to counter any negativity.
The Dark Masquerade Part #01
Comments/critique welcome the noise was deafening. it shook the temple like it was made of cardboard, rattling windows, shaking doors and knocking one prized vase off its place on the display shelf above the central hearth.
The Red Tiger Chapter 3
Be sure to leave a comment and critique if you enjoyed it! please and thank you!
Gnoll Brigand: The Adventure (Prologue I)
Suggestions, critique, and voting go into the comments section. also, the next entry's formatting won't be as sloppy. **prologue i: background** you are a gnoll (that's fantasy-speak for "hyena monster").
The legend of Tigersight Chapter 6
#7 of the legend of tigersight i welcome any critique or suggestions or comments, as these are incentive for me to write more. be it character, story or grammar based, feel free to comment or send me a note/email.
The legend of Tigersight Chapter 5
#6 of the legend of tigersight i welcome any critique or suggestions or comments, as these are incentive for me to write more. be it character, story or grammar based, feel free to comment or send me a note/email.