Words
Also, looking for an editor, or criticism. or both. feel free to comment with a brutally honest opinion. conversation the sound of vehicles on the freeway, just close enough to recognize but distant enough to not catch anyone's attention.
Toner's Guide To Win A Million (Finale Pt 2)
Barbara & eddy, the restaurant critics. "we've noticed they spelled critics wrong for the first half of the race," eddy says, "critics isn't spelled with a q."
Chapter 6: Differing Views
He was critically injured with the first hit, and i checked him over physically as well as with the pokédex. "that's enough i think. that was highly unexpected. you, cheren, tranquil, remember this, this was a one shot victory.
Love in Being Different: Ch. 1
But be nice about, i'd love constructive criticism, but i don't handle hurtful criticism very well. let me know what you furs think! ~enjoy!
Lost Into The Past Chapter 1
All feedback is appreciated, even negative feedback, as long as it's constructive criticism. anything that isn't constructive criticism i'll most likely ignore, as it won't help me in any way.
Experiment 261 Chapter 8
One of my colleagues had been critically injured, and is in a critical but stable condition in hospital. we...have to be prepared for the possibility that we may not find them again...they are former military.
The Other Side Ch 3
Also, i want to give a huge thanks to arcane reno for giving me some really good constructive criticism.
A previous verson of my story idea, please not this is a beta version of my story line written long ago
Her family wasent a ordinary family her father a don of a powerful growing mafia, he mother was gunned down a two ago and was put in critical condition today was the last day she she would have to go into sugery to save her life
All's Fair - Part 2
Your votes/comments/criticisms are welcome. thanks!
Piano Keys and Heart Strings
"i think you're being too modest darius," he said almost critically. "this is some powerful stuff; how did you even come up with this!?"
Kyurex (Pokemon): Part 8 - The Darkness within...
He was choking, the impact severely damaged his chest, having critical consequences on the flareons breathing. revy didn't hesitate or think, she simply ran to help. "bull! are you alright?!!" she asked. the flareon couldn't answer.
Hell Jumpers
I'd rather have criticism then praise, so put plenty of it (constructure criticism please).