Brother Light, Brother Dark: In Which an Adumbral Transaction Takes Place
** **all comments, critiques, and criticisms are welcome.** poverty, shabby houses, beggars, and vendors of overpriced trinkets; a very typical sight for donichus as he walked through the shantytown outer circle of the city bern, a frequent stop of his either
Chapter Sixteen: Secret Reminders
Next one is already done, also short, but i'll let this one stew for a little first. o.o' as always, comments and critiques are welcomed and encouraged. just use your damn brain. :p (a/n: this chapter is from a third-person perspective.
Promise CH.1 -DMFA Fanfiction-
So, i hope you enjoy this story and while your at it, check out the webcomic if you haven't already. ...critique highly appreciated
Kareth's Escape
Stored here so someone can critique it. almost eighty years ago, two intrepid explorers where searching for....something. they came to the planet in search of more asteroids to mine from.
[Story - French] Les enfants ne sont pas des jouets - chap 2
Comme c'est la première fois que je poste quelque chose, toute critique sera extrêmement appréciée (bonnes comme mauvaises).
The New Record (StoryGift)(FlashFic)
"i bet it's a response to recent critiques that bowser's playing favorites with his youngest son." "all i know is i can't wait to see how this year's--" iggy paused the video. he glanced over his shoulder at ludwig's bloated face.
Tales of the Wave Rider, Vol 1: Splintered Light, Epilogue
While many crewmen had thoughts, critiques, and input to provide the tiger announced that his decision was final.
Chapter 2 - Rage
#3 of the journey translated with help of my friend ~benji-blacksky suggestions and critiques are welcome! the original story is already at page 92 (i lost count of the chapters after 14)... lol - wiser!
Brother Light, Brother Dark: In Which One Forgives
All comments, critiques, and criticisms are welcome.** of course, donichus had no idea where he was going, but that didn't stop him from walking. once outside the room, it didn't take very long for talos to catch up to him.
Subjugation, Ch 4
Thank you all for any comments or critique tossed my way. hope you have a nice little read. **chapter 4** the rain had stopped falling but clouds covered up the night sky, casting a somber mood over the city.
An Assassin's Tale Chapter 2: Surprises
As always, critiques and comments are always welcome! cover art is copyright to misora on fa. story and all characters are copyright to me. do not use without permission.
[Story - French] Les enfants ne sont pas des jouets - chap 3
Comme c'est la première fois que je poste quelque chose, j'apprécierai toute critique, qu'elles soient positives ou négatives (tant que ça reste constructif).