The legend of Tigersight Chapter 7
#8 of the legend of tigersight i welcome any critique or suggestions or comments, as these are incentive for me to write more. be it character, story or grammar based, feel free to comment or send me a note/email.
Love's Battlefield - Volume 13
Smirked the rabbit as he set down his mop and critiqued their work. "well, i'd say we did more that we set out to do, wouldn't you guys? i'm about ready to clock out and bit this place adieu, so, care for that car ride now?"
Brother Light, Brother Dark: In Which an Adumbral Transaction Takes Place
** **all comments, critiques, and criticisms are welcome.** poverty, shabby houses, beggars, and vendors of overpriced trinkets; a very typical sight for donichus as he walked through the shantytown outer circle of the city bern, a frequent stop of his either
Chapter Sixteen: Secret Reminders
Next one is already done, also short, but i'll let this one stew for a little first. o.o' as always, comments and critiques are welcomed and encouraged. just use your damn brain. :p (a/n: this chapter is from a third-person perspective.
Promise CH.1 -DMFA Fanfiction-
So, i hope you enjoy this story and while your at it, check out the webcomic if you haven't already. ...critique highly appreciated
Kareth's Escape
Stored here so someone can critique it. almost eighty years ago, two intrepid explorers where searching for....something. they came to the planet in search of more asteroids to mine from.
Tales of the Wave Rider, Vol 1: Splintered Light, Epilogue
While many crewmen had thoughts, critiques, and input to provide the tiger announced that his decision was final.
[Story - French] Les enfants ne sont pas des jouets - chap 3
Comme c'est la première fois que je poste quelque chose, j'apprécierai toute critique, qu'elles soient positives ou négatives (tant que ça reste constructif).
Adventurous Fox Ch 1 (A Slave's Fate)
Anyways thanks for viewing the story, hope you enjoyed it and remember critique is highly appreciated!
Chapter 2 - Rage
#3 of the journey translated with help of my friend ~benji-blacksky suggestions and critiques are welcome! the original story is already at page 92 (i lost count of the chapters after 14)... lol - wiser!
Brother Light, Brother Dark: In Which One Forgives
All comments, critiques, and criticisms are welcome.** of course, donichus had no idea where he was going, but that didn't stop him from walking. once outside the room, it didn't take very long for talos to catch up to him.
Subjugation, Ch 4
Thank you all for any comments or critique tossed my way. hope you have a nice little read. **chapter 4** the rain had stopped falling but clouds covered up the night sky, casting a somber mood over the city.