Dimensional Balance Chapter 2: Into the rift
You have been selected for a critical mission, one that your unique skill set gives us high hopes of success. your main objective is to find and eliminate the threat posed by a man named cyrus.
All's Fair - Part 1
Please comment with your thoughts and especially constructive criticism so that i can keep improving my writing. i won't be offended, and i really love getting feedback, both on my old parts like this one and my newer stuff.
My Girlfriend, the Super Villain: The Day After, Part 1
Hope everyone enjoys, and as always, all constructive criticism is welcome. -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
A Walk Away - Part 1
Leave me some criticism or tell me what you think of the style. this is my first story, be easy guys & gals. (; thanks for reading! _2:57 pm-_ the clock showed 2:57.
Confusion
Take it easy on the criticism! ;3 the great wolf howled to the empty sky, his confusion his pain plain to hear. "why? why must i endure? all the others receive the happiness they wish for..."
When World's Collide: Chapter 1
I'll upload the second one shortly, please feel free to leave a comment, any and all constructive criticism is welcomed!
The Governor and Her Shadow Chapter One
**criticism or feedback is appreciated! :)**
Chapter 4
Don't forget to leave feedback, you guys can criticize me, i won't get mad! i always appreciate advice on how to be better. thanks!!! i had finally gotten started on the frame of the body of the picture i was starting when the last bell rang.
Odd Circumstance
**okay so this is my first time writing a story for others to read :)** **it's a little short story i wanted to write i hope it's not too terrible or repulsive i want to become a better writer so please criticize i really want to hear your
//?A Curious Sergal: Part 3.001
It was quite apparent that in her panicked state, her multitasking was rolling a critical miss. from his vantage point in the trees right in the blind spot behind her ears, this would be easy...
Starting someone else's unfinished journey.
Only this time we lost a critical experiment." she finished. "sorry to hear that. listen why don't you get comfy and have a shower and i'll have dinner ready when you come back out." he finished. she couldn't argue with that as a shower did sound nice.
Writing Advice: Show, Tell, Adverbs and Others
I'm not criticizing the film here (the text is essential and iconic to introduce the story with no further exposition, and is be far more epic and interesting than some of the long, meandering prologues some movies are guilty of), but it provides a good, short