Time Now and Time Than: it all begins somewhere
Ok....this isn't my first story, but i am trying to revise my writing style and story type....i know some people will have comments, but please...don't be too negative....remember...you didn't write it, i did.
Believe – Chapter 23: Last hill
While the others began to silently talk with each other, imya went back to her revision of the journey she had done so far. liam, the male deer, which also was called a stag.
All's Fair - Part 19b
But as dan pulled into the lot at the correction center i revised that assumption. my stomach was roiling, and i really, physically thought i might throw up.
A Better Life Chapter 1 (Revised)
"What are you?" James yelled at the shadow that had appeared infront of him. "I am something you will become in the future if you choose to walk down my path, so tread carefully." replied the shadow. After saying that the shadow flickers out of...
The Patchwork Soldier part IV (revised)
Ten years later... I was sitting in the command deck of my flagship, the Nautilus, crammed into what was possibly THE most uncomfortable command chair ever. It was an ugly thing; a frame of welded steel "padded" with a material resembling...
Chapter 3 - The Mark Of Courage (Revised)
"Kaly? What happened?" I asked and she pointed her finger behind me as I look behind. "Who are you?" An enormous Charizard behind me start to ask. "And what are you doing with my daughter?" "Your daughter?" I asked back. "Yes my daughter." He...
Dearest Husky: Chapter 4: REVISED
We find our little husky friend, Spike wandering down a path in the forest from the house he use to live in. He left early that morning around one am. And now we find him miles away, close to town. His fur along his cheeks and his paws were frozen,...
Dearest Husky: Chapter 1: REVISED
A cold winter breeze blew through the air as a small figure walked through the woods heading toward his cabin. Bundled up in a baggy coat and a pair of snow pants treading through the two and a half feet of snow. This husky was one of the kindest...
Task Force - Weapon Specs (revised)
This isn't a real chapter. I've been working on the Special Assignments Team's weapons and decided to post the specs so you guys can get an idea of what they're working with. **C Series Sub Machine Gun (Jessica's...
Chapter Four
I kinda revised my writing style and hope you guys like it. remember to help me help you by telling me any grammatical errors.
A Tale of Two Lives || Chapter 5- Blossoms in the Winter
It took her a few minutes to think of what to say and revise it to where she thought lasia would take it well, and then she speaks to her daughter, "lasia, sweetie, there's no reason to be ashamed of being jealous of your brother.
Trials: Chapter III
I had to revise the old paperwork for his medical history, myself now written as the legal guardian, removing our parents from the contact lists. later in the night, lewis's phone rang, waking me up from a horrible dream.