Behind Locked Doors | Finale
I don't know if i'll go back and revise them later, but maybe i will. i understand, as this was my first project i have many areas where i need to improve. some of you have already told me and i thank you for your constructive criticism.
All's Fair - Part 19b
But as dan pulled into the lot at the correction center i revised that assumption. my stomach was roiling, and i really, physically thought i might throw up.
Chapter 3 - The Mark Of Courage (Revised)
"Kaly? What happened?" I asked and she pointed her finger behind me as I look behind. "Who are you?" An enormous Charizard behind me start to ask. "And what are you doing with my daughter?" "Your daughter?" I asked back. "Yes my daughter." He...
Dearest Husky: Chapter 4: REVISED
We find our little husky friend, Spike wandering down a path in the forest from the house he use to live in. He left early that morning around one am. And now we find him miles away, close to town. His fur along his cheeks and his paws were frozen,...
Dearest Husky: Chapter 1: REVISED
A cold winter breeze blew through the air as a small figure walked through the woods heading toward his cabin. Bundled up in a baggy coat and a pair of snow pants treading through the two and a half feet of snow. This husky was one of the kindest...
The Patchwork Soldier part IV (revised)
Ten years later... I was sitting in the command deck of my flagship, the Nautilus, crammed into what was possibly THE most uncomfortable command chair ever. It was an ugly thing; a frame of welded steel "padded" with a material resembling...
A Better Life Chapter 1 (Revised)
"What are you?" James yelled at the shadow that had appeared infront of him. "I am something you will become in the future if you choose to walk down my path, so tread carefully." replied the shadow. After saying that the shadow flickers out of...
Task Force - Weapon Specs (revised)
This isn't a real chapter. I've been working on the Special Assignments Team's weapons and decided to post the specs so you guys can get an idea of what they're working with. **C Series Sub Machine Gun (Jessica's...
Chapter Four
I kinda revised my writing style and hope you guys like it. remember to help me help you by telling me any grammatical errors.
A Tale of Two Lives || Chapter 5- Blossoms in the Winter
It took her a few minutes to think of what to say and revise it to where she thought lasia would take it well, and then she speaks to her daughter, "lasia, sweetie, there's no reason to be ashamed of being jealous of your brother.
Writing Advice: Before You Write
Editing, polishing, and revising until it got there. but, this idea of 'genius' lingers because it's an appealing fantasy in popular culture, and a bit of a marketing gimmick too. don't fall for it.
The Pillow Book of Sethira: Prologue and Translator's Note
**a/n:** last revised 3/11/2023; mild grammatical edits, nothing major. * * * sleepiness and boredom lingered in the air of the athenaeum like a fog, making the eyelids of all patrons and staff heavy as they inhaled the noxious air.