New Revelations
_note: no critiques, this is just for shits and giggles, nothing professional that's ever going to be published_ _prologue: [http://www.sofurry.com/view/496375](http://www.sofurry.com/view/496375)_ _chapter 2: [http://www.sofurry.com/view
Heart of Ice Ch.8
"not bad, i can taste a little bit of spiciness from the soup and the bamboo is pretty good too," markus critiqued, scooping a piece of lasagna and garlic onto his fork before doing the same thing to me.
My friend is a dinosaur - 01
As always, comments, suggestions, corrections and critique is always welcome. **my friend is a dinosaur** duck, jump, run fast, aiming around for possible enemies.
The Succubus and her Butler
"that's not enough, you know that," he critiqued her. it actually felt very good and he knew he was going to have to hold himself back to give her a proper lesson. she tried to take him in further and gasped a little bit.
The Lead Crown: Ch 8.4b, A Dozen 'Tails' Told
The floor is now open for questions, comments, and critiques!
Prologue
Please please please critique!!! the version i am posting is a late revision -- major changes may still occur before it is finalized, whatever that may entail.
Almost Let Go
As always, comments and critique appreciated. thanks for reading!
The Lead Crown: Ch 9.3b, Shock and Awe
Comments, questions, quandaries, critiques, and input is always appreciated. thanks for reading! tranquil waters: the lead crown ch 9.3, shock and awe the fight against the church's men had been a tough one.
Black Blood Chapter 1
It's been quite some time since i've written anything, so any critique is welcomed
The Meeting
So going back to the interesting thing at hand, i hope you enjoy the story and please critique me as you see fit. **the meeting** despair... _no... nooo!_ destruction... _...
waltz into moonlight
They turn and see the instructor applausing them, so they smile a bit and bow, walking over, turning off the song and talking with them, as they talk, the instructor gives a few minor critiques and then praises them for their hard work in organizing their
One More Chance in Love
I would also like any critique of this from anybody. * * * a happy heart is what always brings good things to the table. a loving heart shares affections, caring, kindness, and felicity. but not everyone could keep that kind of heart.