Before the Show
Could use a general critique if you happen to have any. i'm just getting back into writing. this is an excerpt from a scene i'm working on.
Fursonalized, Chapter 2 - A Whole New World
As before, critiques are welcomed. this is the last bit of the valentine's day gift section of the story.
Feyrahl, SF Ch 3.2
The comments seemed mostly directed at himself, but the human didn't mind getting the lion's perspective so he simply listened to khosk gripe and critique.
young hearts
This is my first story so critique is welcome and please post your comments. ;) todd slammed down on the alarm clock. he slowly started to rub the sleep from his eye's but he felt something wrong with his face.
A Fateful Fall Encounter
P-please respond (with critique, preferably). it was a peaceful autumn evening at the park. children exhausted from a long day of playing in the leaves were taken back home by their mothers.
The Subject
As always, comments, critique, and anything else you want to provide is greatly appreciated! fire away! "sir? we're ready for you." i jerked from my stupor, blinking away the glaze of hours i'd spent in the puny waiting room, "huh? oh, uh, right..."
The Dragon and the Steed Part 6
Please leave critique :d part 6 'is it really that nice where you come from?' fray asked, his eyes bright with excitement about the thought of his new home.
Chase tries drag
"you're just reading ru paul's critiques, aren't you? "what if i am?" "then i'll stop you." chase hugged kudzu and kissed him, the eyeliner and lipstick marking the raccoon's face. "oops, i-" "it's alright, i kinda like it.
Shade & Luna Chapter 1: Welcome to the (Concrete) Jungle
_this is my first story, please critique it in the comments and don't forget to rate, subscrive, favorite, or anything up to and including worship. thank you._
The Family Curse Chapter 1: A Change of Perspective
Don't forget to vote, critique and fav this story if you like it. i am always open for suggestions. you may also request oc cameos, tie-ins or full roles in my stories. i will do my best to include them.
Brother Light, Brother Dark: In Which Brothers Will Be Brothers
All comments, critiques, and criticisms are welcome.** "i don't need to be reminded of our pasts when enough comes to mind about it already," tyrannio snapped. "i'm well aware of both our histories enough for my understanding.
The Marked Ones - Arc 0: Chapter 1 - Before the Storm
I'm just so... tired" ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ _sorry if it seems short, but like i said i'm still thinking about the details of the chapters_ _feel free to review and constructively critique =